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Robotics Newsroom: Edit Voice and Mood

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Robotics Newsroom: Edit Voice and Mood

Keep a competition report clear without removing useful changes in voice or mood.

Read the newsroom draft

This draft contains deliberate editing problems. Notice who performs each action and whether a verb states, asks, commands, or imagines.

A Reset Before the Final Round

1At Saturday’s district robotics competition, students from Crestview School entered a machine designed to move foam blocks into scoring zones. Their robot completed the opening route but stopped beside the final platform. From the viewing area, the pause looked like a mechanical failure. At the team table, however, students were already checking the program that controlled the last turn.

2During the repair break, each student had a separate task and a limited amount of time. Saira checked the wheel alignment while a diagnostic screen displayed the motor readings. Beck adjusted the sensor after the team traced the stop to a loose connection. The student reporter’s notes were meant to identify who completed each repair. Those notes read, “Saira tightened the bracket while the cable was secured by Beck.”

3Across the aisle, the announcer called the next group toward the practice area. The student reporter kept writing beside the team table. A volunteer raised a hand toward students approaching the marked boundary. “Keep the entrance clear,” the volunteer called as another team rolled its equipment toward the inspection table. The students moved their tool cases and continued working. No points were deducted during the repair break.

4Crestview’s adviser asked that every driver test the emergency stop before returning to the arena. The reporter copied that request into the draft: “The adviser asked that each driver test the stop switch and checks the battery.” The team’s written safety card also needed an edit. It read, “Place the robot behind the line, and are your hands clear?” Both parts were intended as direct instructions for drivers preparing to begin.

5The repaired robot completed the course in the final round. The results were posted near the exit, and the certificates were handed to the team captains. The draft’s results section was meant to keep the awards themselves in focus. Its next sentence read, “The teamwork award was presented by the judges, who then praised Crestview’s repair plan.” Several students photographed the results before packing their equipment.

6Afterward, the students discussed what they would change before another competition. Beck offered a hypothetical plan: “If our robot were lighter, it will turn more quickly.” Saira suggested a shorter route between scoring zones. Their adviser recorded both ideas for the next meeting. The team left with a working robot, a page of test notes, and several decisions still to make.

1.
In paragraph 3, the report changes from statements to a quoted command. Why should that change in mood remain?
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2.
Underline the sentence from paragraph 3 that directly records the volunteer giving the instruction.

3.
In paragraph 2, the notes are meant to identify each student’s repair work: “Saira tightened the bracket while the cable was secured by Beck.” Which diagnosis best explains what needs editing?
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4.
Consider this sentence from paragraph 4: “The adviser asked that each driver test the stop switch and checks the battery.” Which replacement for “checks” keeps both verbs in the form used for the adviser’s request?
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5.
The safety card in paragraph 4 reads, “Place the robot behind the line, and are your hands clear?” An editor changes it to “Is the robot behind the line, and are your hands clear?” How should the revision be evaluated?
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6.
In paragraph 6, Beck says, “If our robot were lighter, it will turn more quickly.” Which revision consistently presents the result as part of that hypothetical situation?
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Make the editing decisions

Use the report’s context and each stated editing goal. Preserve who did what and keep purposeful shifts.

7.
The results section in paragraph 5 should keep the things presented and praised, not the judges, as the subjects. Which revision of “The teamwork award was presented by the judges, who then praised Crestview’s repair plan” meets that goal without changing the actions?
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8.
Sort these proposed additions by whether the voice or mood shift fits the stated purpose.
9.
A reporter writes, “Would the driver check the cable and tightens the connector?” Which revision keeps both actions within the same question?
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10.
A caption draft says, “The robot was ready, and the drivers entered the arena.” An editor marks “was ready” as passive voice. Which response is accurate?
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11.
A deadline note reads, “Submit the final captions, and the editor checks the names.” The note should state two newsroom routines, not give commands. Which revision meets that goal?
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12.
Which proposed sentence keeps both a hypothetical condition and its result consistent, without introducing a command?
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13.
Edit this proposed closing sentence so both actions are statements in active voice: “Beck explained the repair, and let the testing process be described by Saira.” Preserve who does each action. Then explain how your revision fixes both the voice shift and the mood shift.